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PostSubject: Hiryu Takahashi Jutsu (Approved)(Main Character)   Thu Feb 04, 2016 10:46 pm

Name: Kaiseiken
Rank: B
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Fire
Clan: Takahashi
Description: Flames spring forth from the user’s entire hand. If the user balls their hand into a fist the flames immediately disperse and the jutsu is cancelled. In this way, only spear-handed attacks can be made and their potency is increased so that most defenses are pierced. Can only be used 3 times a day and leaves user vulnerable for 1 post after if used past 3 times. This technique is comparable in strength to most other B rank jutsu. It can defeat C/D rank taijutsu/ninjutsu in most cases. Water weakness.

Name: Fireproof Technique
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Fire
Clan: Takahashi
Description: More resilience to fire for better defense. At this point in time, the user has developed a natural resilience to flame and has come to know the pros and cons of their own techniques. Acts as a shield or buffer against all forms of heat, preventing them from harmful C/D level taijutsu and fire techniques. By freely imparting this chakra onto a person or thing he is able to pass on that very same shield for 1 post. At C rank this technique last 2 posts and may be used 2 times per topic.

Name: Flame Spread Technique
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Fire
Clan: N/A
Description: Extend the flame from their hand to any weapon or item they may be holding. This creates a surrounding layer of flame around the object, but the object is unharmed. This can only extend to a length of 3 feet maximum, or the length of a medium sized sword. At D rank this ability may last 1 post.

Name: Ember Clone Technique
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Fire
Clan: N/A
Description: A basic clone crafted from flame. At this level, the clone is quite weak and can only really serve as a distracted more so than a viable combat replacement. Upon destruction or command the clone can detonate slightly damaging anyone nearby. Can create 1 clone that lasts 1 post.


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PostSubject: Re: Hiryu Takahashi Jutsu (Approved)(Main Character)   Thu Feb 04, 2016 11:44 pm

Code:
[b]Name:[/b]
[b]Rank:[/b]
[b]Type:[/b]
[b]Element:[/b]
[b]Clan:[/b]
[b]Description:[/b]

Currently missing Type, Element, and Clan categories. After edits this post will be reviewed by Admin for approval
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PostSubject: Re: Hiryu Takahashi Jutsu (Approved)(Main Character)   Fri Feb 05, 2016 12:13 am

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PostSubject: Re: Hiryu Takahashi Jutsu (Approved)(Main Character)   Fri Feb 05, 2016 12:28 am

Duration: 2 posts
Damage: none
Activation Chakra (AC): 4
Maintain Chakra(MC): 1
Buffs: none
Effects: none

These categories are unnecessary. Please include notes such as duration of a jutsu and effect under the "description" ie "Creates a fire clone that lasts 2 posts" or "Puts small flames around the fists that can be passed to weapons. This lasts until dispelled and has a chance of burning the opponent when hit."
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PostSubject: Re: Hiryu Takahashi Jutsu (Approved)(Main Character)   Fri Feb 05, 2016 11:01 am

Everything looks fine with this, other than "go" because if it matches Chidori that would make it an A rank jutsu since Chidori is an A rank jutsu. So if you could change this to either "nerf" it, or if you need some help I can.
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PostSubject: Re: Hiryu Takahashi Jutsu (Approved)(Main Character)   Fri Feb 05, 2016 11:05 am

I think i worded it weird it not on the same level as chidori, its the step before the technique that is like chidori.
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PostSubject: Re: Hiryu Takahashi Jutsu (Approved)(Main Character)   Fri Feb 05, 2016 11:06 am

Kaiseiken is the technique that is like chidori not go
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PostSubject: Re: Hiryu Takahashi Jutsu (Approved)(Main Character)   Fri Feb 05, 2016 11:12 am

Sorry, the name said "go" if you could re-word it to make it more obvious the damaging capabilities are that would be great, I wouldn't mind if you said "later it can become stronger and do blank and etc" but it I need it a little more clear on its capabilities at this rank.
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PostSubject: Re: Hiryu Takahashi Jutsu (Approved)(Main Character)   Fri Feb 05, 2016 11:13 am

or even say "go is the building block towards kaiseiken. Go does...." that would be great and we can do the kaiseiken jutsu build later. work?
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PostSubject: Re: Hiryu Takahashi Jutsu (Approved)(Main Character)   Fri Feb 05, 2016 11:29 am

updated wording, you can decide a fair level of damage
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PostSubject: Re: Hiryu Takahashi Jutsu (Approved)(Main Character)   Fri Feb 05, 2016 11:53 am

Do edits on your first post so that we can keep track of it easily. For everyone we will quote the first post when we approve so that it can't be edited for changes after its been approved once. As far as "Go" I recommend you have a limit to the amount of times you can use it per day in conjunction with your other spells and jutsu. Also if it does a "spear-handed attack" at B rank will probably pierce through most D/C/B rank ninjutsu with the exception of course for water styled, earth styled, or kekkei genkai ninjutsu. This combat style is roleplayed after all so it will be entirely up to your opponent how they handle taking the attack.

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PostSubject: Re: Hiryu Takahashi Jutsu (Approved)(Main Character)   Fri Feb 05, 2016 12:41 pm

I have labeled what is passive and what is active
the passive part is just an overall higher resilience to fire and the activated ability is the fire chakra shield
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PostSubject: Re: Hiryu Takahashi Jutsu (Approved)(Main Character)   Fri Feb 05, 2016 12:46 pm

Everything looks good.

"Can only be used once a day and leaves user vulnerable for 1 post after use."

I was saying you can use it once a day without strain, but if you use it a second time it can cause strain. Up to you though.

@Poleon will approve when he reviews.

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PostSubject: Re: Hiryu Takahashi Jutsu (Approved)(Main Character)   Fri Feb 05, 2016 12:53 pm

I like it all, not sure if you are going to changed based upon what Shimura said. Also if you could state that if you detonate the clones they cause damage to anyone around not just enemies that would be great, but like Shimura said it is up to you about the one change he was meaning. just let me know what you decide on it, and when you edit to say the detonation thing. Thanks

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PostSubject: Re: Hiryu Takahashi Jutsu (Approved)(Main Character)   Fri Feb 05, 2016 12:59 pm

alright everything has been fixed and I updated from 1 to 2 uses
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PostSubject: Re: Hiryu Takahashi Jutsu (Approved)(Main Character)   Fri Feb 19, 2016 11:40 am

why is Go not able to beat earth based attacks? Fire isn't weak to earth. @shimura @poleon @vorcha
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PostSubject: Re: Hiryu Takahashi Jutsu (Approved)(Main Character)   Fri Feb 19, 2016 2:56 pm

Poleon will review, we will discuss edits to your jutsu since you were one of the first characters created there have been slight changes.

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PostSubject: Re: Hiryu Takahashi Jutsu (Approved)(Main Character)   Fri Feb 19, 2016 2:58 pm

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PostSubject: Re: Hiryu Takahashi Jutsu (Approved)(Main Character)   Fri Feb 19, 2016 5:58 pm

Quote :
Name: Kaiseiken
Rank: B
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Fire
Clan: Takahashi
Description: Flames spring forth from the user’s entire hand. If the user balls their hand into a fist the flames immediately disperse and the jutsu is cancelled. In this way, only spear-handed attacks can be made and their potency is increased so that most defenses are pierced. Can only be used 3 times a day and leaves user vulnerable for 1 post after if used past 3 times. This technique is comparable in strength to most other B rank jutsu. It can defeat C/D rank taijutsu/ninjutsu in most cases. Water weakness.

Name: Fireproof Technique
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Fire
Clan: Takahashi
Description: More resilience to fire for better defense. At this point in time, the user has developed a natural resilience to flame and has come to know the pros and cons of their own techniques. Acts as a shield or buffer against all forms of heat, preventing them from harmful C/D level taijutsu and fire techniques. By freely imparting this chakra onto a person or thing he is able to pass on that very same shield for 1 post. At C rank this technique may be used 2 times per topic.

Name: Flame Spread Technique
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Fire
Clan: N/A
Description: Extend the flame from their hand to any weapon or item they may be holding. This creates a surrounding layer of flame around the object, but the object is unharmed. This can only extend to a length of 3 feet maximum, or the length of a medium sized sword. At D rank this ability may last 1 post.

Name: Ember Clone Technique
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Fire
Clan: N/A
Description: A basic clone crafted from flame. At this level, the clone is quite weak and can only really serve as a distracted more so than a viable combat replacement. Upon destruction or command the clone can detonate slightly damaging anyone nearby. Can create 1 clone that lasts 1 post.

Approved Please edit your complete profile to reflect the changes Smile

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